So far as the fight scene's concerned, doing a third-person omniscient observation there and only there made it out of place. The " He tried, he really did..." is what I'm referring to.
So far as her name, it wouldn't be hard for the mom to say it, would it, considering she knows the girl already, and she already spilled the ninja beans on her son?
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Date: 2008-09-27 01:10 am (UTC)So far as her name, it wouldn't be hard for the mom to say it, would it, considering she knows the girl already, and she already spilled the ninja beans on her son?