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2008-09-26 10:14 pm (UTC)
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The fight scene, I think, wasn't as clear as it could have been.
I suck at fight scenes. Always have known this. What do you think could have been worded differently?
I don't like the fact that the blonde chick's name is left out for quite so long
I was worried about that too. I wasn't sure how to work it in earlier, though. Any suggestions?
and the dialog in the scene there seems as though it would fit better post-fight.
Hmm, okay. I'll play around and see what I can do.
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I suck at fight scenes. Always have known this. What do you think could have been worded differently?
I don't like the fact that the blonde chick's name is left out for quite so long
I was worried about that too. I wasn't sure how to work it in earlier, though. Any suggestions?
and the dialog in the scene there seems as though it would fit better post-fight.
Hmm, okay. I'll play around and see what I can do.