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2008-09-26 05:36 pm (UTC)
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I never got into Naruto, much.
You wanted a critique, right?
The fight scene, I think, wasn't as clear as it could have been. I don't like the fact that the blonde chick's name is left out for quite so long, and the dialog in the scene there seems as though it would fit better post-fight.
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You wanted a critique, right?
The fight scene, I think, wasn't as clear as it could have been. I don't like the fact that the blonde chick's name is left out for quite so long, and the dialog in the scene there seems as though it would fit better post-fight.